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Post by Pokefreak2000Matt on May 4, 2004 6:11:04 GMT -5
Character Profiles
Name: Arcanine 2000
Alias: Pokefreak2000
Appearance: short brown hair brown eyes normal size ears firm face short nose mechanic eye.
Clothing: a cap t-shirt and vest and blue jeans
Weaponry: falcon 2 (silenced),shotgun,cyclone
Advantages: his speed for fast getaways
Disadvantages: his strengths he sometimes may forget what he is there for and just destroy everything in his path
OWE: falcon 2 (silenced),is from perfect dark,shotgun,is from perfect dark,cyclone,is from perfect dark
GW: grapling hook wrist watch,heat seaking eye
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OWE
Name: katana
Type: sword
Features: powerfull swipes
From: hitman2
Other:
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Gadget War
You may only have 3 "Gadgets". You do not have to make them now, but when the GW arena comes out. Or, you may feel to make them now.
GadgetWar Weapon Profile
Name: heat seaking eye,grapling hook wrist wtch
Type: mech.eye,watch
Appearance: mech.eye,wrist watch
Abilities: able to sence heat and see where the opponent is through any thing,grapling hook able to pull me up to safe places (where possible)and sedate other players if they are hit by it
Other: put any other comments here
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Vehicles
Name: speeder
Class: a hovering vehicle able to reach high speeds
Appearance: like a hovering moterbike
Armaments: front machine gun
Features: cloakink device
History: i found it on a mission and kept it and made it better
Advantages: the cloaking
Disadvantages: very slow turning
History:Arcanine2000 used to be an ordinary cop until one day when he was chasing an escaped mental patient he was shot in the eye and got brain damage the docters recovered him but he was not himself he was stronger faster but dumber and he killed the docters escaped and is now out for revenge and he will kill anyone in his way
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Post by Garrant on May 4, 2004 6:43:29 GMT -5
Uh, your profile needs some work. First off, forgeting that your powerful and destroying everything isn't a weakness it's a strenght and a god moding one at that. Your 'laser eye' is also god moding since it can kill anything. Just fix up some of these things and you should have a nice, solid profile for your character. Nice first try for your profile. ;D
Oh, if any other mods got somethign to say that I missed please say so.
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Post by N3B on May 4, 2004 14:12:43 GMT -5
well, it could be a disadvantage, because he wouldn't be able to think logically, and likely do something stupid. *flops arm in air* i would just say specify which pistol it is you're using, since there are several, and make the laser eye less uber god. it can still be severely dangerous, but word it differently. i don't like the alias, just because it doesn't sound "PDBA-esque". but you can ignore that comment, since your alias is mostly your decision. just know that i would be jubilant if it was changed. i'm going to call you arcanine in arenas, because that sounds alot cooler  other than that, it's fairly well. i imagine as time passes you'll steadily develop it more. |
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Post by JeanLuc on May 4, 2004 17:02:04 GMT -5
Hmmmmm, it's a little bit... iffy.
The obvious godmoding stuff (laser eye) needs to be changed and/or removed. Your laser eye CANNOT be instant kill.
Your katana needs to be less powerful. It can't decapitate in one slash. That's an obvious godmode.
Include a history in your profile, or at least say you're amniesic.
Check out Phife's profile. Pretty extensive stuff.
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Post by Draxas on May 4, 2004 17:50:40 GMT -5
Well, most long blades (like katanas) are sharp enough to decapitate in a single slash... The trick is getting close enough to use them. Don't rely on swords too much, or the guys with guns will walk all over you.
However... This profile does need a good bit of help.
As has already been said, the GodMode equipment needs to be toned down or removed completely, most notably that Laser Eye.
I don't know about you, and I won't stop you if this is the case, but I sure as heck wouldn't want to be named after a Pokemon, not even a decently powerful one like Arcanine.
Very strong and very fast are advantages, and have nothing to do with your appearance.
Identify which pistol you use. I assume you mean a Falcon 2, but PD has nearly 10 different pistols to choose from... If you need help deciding, check the arms and equipment guide in the Archives.
That disadvantage is a bit iffy... Not sure what else to say.
Grenades and N-Bombs can be put into your regular weapons profile, they needn't be restricted to Gadget War. Similarly, your OWE profile doesn't need to include anything already in PD.
If you DO decide to keep your laser eye, that really should be reflected in your appearance. It tends to involve major surgery when you want to remove one of those...
I cannot stress this enough: Some kind of background information is critical for others to roleplay you correctly. If you can't think of a complex backstory, at least put down SOMETHING... And if you want to develop a good backstory, you can check the profiles for myself, NeoPhife, Golden Magnum, Notesurfer, Razor, and many others to see a good way to go about it. We really should start requiring a background in order for profiles to be valid...
Your vehicle profile makes me wonder if you're even taking this seriously... If this is a joke, ha-ha, we've been had, good one, now delete this profile. If it's not... Well, come on. Rocket launching nipples? You found it in a dumpster? Nobody requires you to have a vehicle, so if you really don't want to put a real effort into making a vehicle, and are just taking a vehicle for the sake of having one, you don't have to use one at all and it's fine with us. Better to have a solid profile all around, than to have one glaringly lame section making people wonder whether you're just here to pull our legs.
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Post by N3B on May 4, 2004 18:49:30 GMT -5
... i didn't know arcanine was a pokemon ...
anyways, what you have so far is good, just needs a little tidying up, ie fixing typos, notes made by me for use of making the profile, ie "other comments go here".
i imagine/hope you'll expand it alot more the longer you're here. this is sufficient though.
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NeoPhife
PDBA Veteran
Tin Can Warrior
Posts: 525
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Post by NeoPhife on May 4, 2004 19:31:45 GMT -5
Check out Phife's profile. Pretty extensive stuff. ;D Anyway, I'll cut through what has been said already. At this point, your profile has improved vastly from the original one that was posted. I just have a few suggestions. Do you have a picture of the Hitman katana or can you describe it verbally? The only other suggestion would be that, in your history, describe how your character comes across the PDBA and gets involved. Besides those details, it's all kosher as far as I know. |
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Post by niff on May 5, 2004 23:28:27 GMT -5
*finger twitches above remove topic button*
Come on, anyone can do better than that.. this better be a joke.
*also has trouble thinking of a backstory*
*can't be bothered either*
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Post by JeanLuc on May 26, 2004 14:36:44 GMT -5
But seriously people, can't you give him a LITTLE credit, just for trying? Also, why does everyone bash Pokemon? It's a pretty good show to me.  |
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Post by Draxas on May 26, 2004 14:58:10 GMT -5
What you see here is a vast improvement over the original profile. As it stands, I don't have too much problem with it anymore... But then again, this is the only post PF2KM has ever made... When I see him in the arena, I'll have more to say.
And I used to watch Pokemon all the time. And play the games. And collect the TCG cards. Etc. I have no problem with Pokemon per se, besides the fact that they don't belong in the PD universe.
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The Fix
Junior
Nobody's real but the villain.
Posts: 70
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Post by The Fix on Aug 3, 2004 22:32:37 GMT -5
That had to be one of the most ridiculous things I've ever had the misfortune to read.
This has to be a joke...
(PS: Just change the damn Hitman 2 Katana. It's from MANY other games, and I can't stand the name of the best game ever made being involved with such utter garbage.)
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